We are looking at the skill of showing, not telling, and it’s going to transform your writing as long as you put it into practice afterwards.
“Show, not tell. what’s he talking about?”
When we’re writing we want to avoid simple statements that don’t really add any description or flavor. for example:
The man was stressed.
Boring. Instead, I want you to paint a picture, I really want you to describe the man is stressed without telling me that he is.
So how can you do that?
We’re kind of trying to avoid this word, and describe it instead.
The man was fidgeting and biting his nails.
The room was messy.
There was a leftover pizza, dirty clothes were strewn
The woman was confident.
She strode into the room and everyone turned their heads to notice her.
The boy was careful.
He placed his favourite magazine in the top drawer of his cabinet.
The stadium was full
The sound from the stadium was deafening.
A couple of ones to describe weather.
It was hot.
The sun was causing damage to…..
The sun was burning.
The sun was melting.
The sun was causing the lady’s skin to turn red.
It was cold.
Drainpipes were freezing.
It was windy
The umbrella was totally bent out of shape(out of its normal position).
He found it funny.
He was rolling around the floor in hysterics.
The castle was captured.
The new flag was hoisted up on high, greeted by a cheer from the crowd.